Eroica’s Erotica, Episode 6: Run-on Sentences

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Run-on sentences have too many elements stuck together in one sentence.

Eroica smiled without judgment and read me another passage this time she placed one hand on my crotch while she read and I could not hide my excitement.

Eroica is just doing too much to fit into one sentence, especially since the narrator is the subject of some action too!

To fix a run-on, identify your subjects:

Eroica smiled without judgment and read me another passage this time she placed one hand on my crotch while she read, and I could not hide my excitement.

Then, use your solid understanding of compound and complex sentence structures to fix problematic sentences. Often, as in this run-on sentence, you can split up the sentence based on the subject.

Since Eroica creates most of the action in this run-on, we can combine a few of the verb phrases into one sentence with a complex predicate.

Eroica smiled without judgment. She placed one hand on my crotch and read me another passage. I could not hide my excitement.

Or try combining one sentence with a complex predicate with a compound sentence:

Eroica smiled without judgment and placed one hand on my crotch. She read me another passage, and I could not hide my excitement.

 

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  1. I hope you will help me with my sentences once I publish my first short story on my blog.

    X, Maria

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