Eroica’s Erotica, Episode 7: Comma Splice

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Here’s an example of how to use your solid understanding of compound and complex sentence structures to fix another problematic sentence, the comma splice:

Eroica and I read the sex scenes to each other for hours, the teasing was excruciating.

You can’t just stick two independent clauses together like that with a comma. You could easily cut this into two sentences:

Eroica and I read the sex scenes to each other for hours.

The teasing was excruciating.

But it might be sexier to make it into a compound sentence or two independent clauses separated by a semicolon:

Eroica and I read the sex scenes to each other for hours, but the teasing was excruciating.

Eroica and I read the sex scenes to each other for hours; the teasing was excruciating.

Or you could scrap the whole thing and write something even simpler.  Does the excruciating teasing really need a whole phrase to itself?

Eroica and I read the sex scenes to each other for three excruciating hours.

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