Role-Swapping: Subjects, Objects, and a Sexy Trick for Sentence Revision
Kiki handed the handcuffs to Al.
When your action is hot, but the sentence is not, try looking at your nouns and their syntax, the roles they play in the sentence.
Kiki is the subject, which drives the action of the sentence.
Handcuffs is the direct object, which receives the action of the verb handed.
Al is the indirect object, which receives the direct object handcuffs.
We’ve got some awfully sexy nouns to work with here, so let’s experiment with role-swapping. That is, change the syntax. What happens when we put Al in the driver’s seat as the subject? What is Al doing?
Al accepted the handcuffs from Kiki.
That’s different at least, but I’m still not feeling it. What if the handcuffs become the subject? What are the handcuffs doing?
The handcuffs fell from Kiki‘s hands into Al‘s.
See how the hot action of the sentence just got a little hotter? By swapping the nouns until you find the sexiest possible syntax, you can build sexy sentences every time.
The Sexy Grammarian teaches writers to create tight, juicy, scantily clad sentences and combines sexually explicit examples with grammar instruction, but she never does it alone. Writing this post, she got extra help from the twitterverse, specifically @EditorMark @JulieFrayn @GrammarROCKS, and @mededitor. Thanks, tweeps!